May 10, 2014

Plot Exercises

I've found that when plotting, I'm good at set up and a couple dramatic moments, but the rest of it is a challenge and could be stronger.  In the interest of self-improvement, this week I worked on writing very short stories that have a full arc and an end. 

To do this, I wrote synopses for episodes of Adventure Time.  Why?  Why not!  Actually, no, I have reasons.
  • Using a show that already exists, I don't have to devote any energy to character building or world building.  I can use what's already there.  This is purely a plot exercise.
  • Adventure Time episodes are about 11 minutes long.  They are short short short and my synopses can be short short short.
  • The show keeps the plot moving continuously, with very few moments of pure introspection.  They do happen, but they're brief or encased within a larger plot element.  I do introspection a lot and forcing myself not to do it to stay with the style of the show keeps me better on track.
Since they're so bare bones, they are missing snappy dialogue, little ukulele songs, fart jokes, and visual puns involving unexploded nuclear weapons.  It's a shame, but I don't have time to write scripts or story boards.

Observation #1: there's a lot of deus ex machina in here.  I think that's because it's pretty common in the show.  I will have to pick a show where it is less common to find out.

Observation #2: These get longer as they go along.  I'm not sure more happens, but the description gets longer.

Synopses below the cut.




Episode 1

Finn and Jake (with Finn much more excited about it) go to the Wizard Disco, only to find that it's closed. The Grand Wizard is in a dither because he and his cat are fighting, and he doesn't feel like getting his boogie on. Jake grumpily says that he's not wearing these platform shoes for nothing and Finn better make those crazy kids kiss and make up so they can dance and then go home and take a nap. So Finn and Jake go to Hot Dog Princess' yard, since that's where the cat huffed off to. Hot Dog Princess says that the cat is very angry and doesn't want to talk to Finn, which starts a string of messages that Finn and Jake transport back and forth between the Grand Wizard and the cat. Finn is perfectly happy to carry message, but Jake is getting more and more irritated, especially since they can't seem to decide what they're fighting over. They're mad about feeding and string color and how the other has a goofy snot face.  (The cat meows rather than speak English.) Jake's just about to lose it, because if they hate each other so much, why are they mad that they aren't hanging out anymore? But before he can blow a fuse, Hot Dog Princess looses her cool, shouting that she's done carrying message from the cat to Finn, and the cat has eatten all her tortilla chips and spoiled all her favorite TV shows and needs to get out. The cat is embarrassed and newly homeless. Finn and Jake drop him off at the door to the disco, ring the bell, and run away. The Grand Magician takes the cat back with a big hug and a declaration that “I missed your goofy snot face.” At which the cat rolls his eyes.

Episode 2

Princess Bubblegum sends Finn and Jake with an antidote for the water nymphs' gross-skin-itis. Their blue skin looks kind of green in patches and the antidote is a kind of cream. The nymphs are hesitant to use it because it smells like toenails and sugar packets, but then one decides she's not afraid and globs it on. None of the nymphs want to be left out, so they all have goop on them, even in places that they don't have gross-skin-itis. Mission accomplished, Finn and Jake head home. A few days later, an angry Bubblegum tells them that all the water in the kingdom tastes sweet and smells like toenails. Finn and Jake go to investigate and discover that the water nymphs have completely covered themselves in the cream to the point where they look kind of like swamp monsters. They've decorated the cream on their faces with leaves and sticks so they look like masks, and the cream is seeping around them in the water. Gross! The nymphs say they've never looked prettier, and Finn and Jake can't argue with them without being jerks. Bubblegum is still ticked, even though, as Jake puts it, “But they're so happy! And none of them have that weird rash!” Bubblegum gives zero shits and readies her mobile water canon to hose those nymphs down. The nymphs rally their forces, assembling weapons and fortifications made of cream and sticks. Just as their ready to battle, Manfried runs up between the armies to thank everyone, because the gross-skin-itis in his throat has cleared up thanks to the water. His voice is now different. Bubblegum reconsiders and asks, “doesn't anyone care that the water tastes sweet?” Peppermint Butler can't taste it (because he's made of candy) and the banana guards didn't notice that it smells weird (because they don't have noses.) PB sighs and leaves, and the nymphs have a great time.


Episode 3

BMO brings home a coffee maker. “I found it at the dump :D” Jake happens to have coffee around somewhere from way back when, and whips up a pot. Finn is skeptical, and even grossed out on first sip, but quickly changes his mind and drinks way too much very quickly. He's hyper around the house as Jake watches and says he's had too much coffee, which Finn denies. Jake sends him outside to run around or something, and Finn circles the house four times before picking a fight with a squirrel, which escalates to a fight with a herd of squirrels. BMO sends Jake to check on Finn because she wants to play “bungee jump shocker,” and Jake finds Finn in the middle of fighting a helicopter-shark, a dozen anthropomorphic dandelion tufts, a purple warrior girl in a hula skirt, and a wolf. Finn is screaming, holding two swords, covered in scratches, and a little bit on fire. Jake stares and says “whoa,” before breaking everything up by separating everyone with his stretchy powers. The shark, dog, and hula girl grumble and walk off, while the dandelion tufts continue their barrage, which Finn ignores. Jake tries to tell him that he's too hyper and needs to calm down, and Finn continues to insist that he's fineJustReadyForActionThanks, when a giant garbage robot with spinning blades and ray guns stomps up, demanding his coffee maker back. BMO shouts Nooooooo and charges the robot. Finn has to save her/help her defeat the robot. “Quick! Use your antsy, caffeine powers!” Finn flies around, swiping at the robot, landing the final blow against its face so it falls in a heap. Jake admits that maybe the coffee wasn't so bad. Finn laughs and says they should go drink some more, but then passes out as his rush wears off.

Episode 4

Marceline is on a quest to find the perfect amp, and Finn and Jake go with her to the music store. She tries a few, but none are exactly what she wants. The owner says that he herd there was the greatest amp ever, with rad sound, in the Lumpy Space Rock Stock. Marcelline groans that she hates going to Lumpy Space because the King of Lumpy Space has such a square with bad taste in music, but they go anyway. In Lumpy Space, they have to ask around for how to get to the Rock Stock, And in doing so they meet several citizens of Lumpy Space and Marcelline complains about everything she hates about Lumpy Space, with their clouds and and pastels and psychedelic techno music. Eventually they make it to the Rock Stock, only to find that the citizens of Lumpy Space have tipped off the King of Lumpy Space, who says he will only let her have the amp if she can beat him in a battle of the bands. He plays the vibraphone, with a beat box set up, and Marcelline plays bass and sings about how mad she still is that the King beat her in a battle of the bands 30 years ago. Turns out that they once toured together, but broke up when the king went and got married and started writing only love songs all the time. The King says that he doesn't do that anymore. Now all his songs are about disrespectful children and premature balding. Marceline doesn't think that's much better, but it's kind of funny. He agrees to let her have the amp, because she won the battle of the bands, and he hopes that she'll use it to rock out. The owner of the store however tells her that it'll cost 18,000 diamonds, which is outrageous, and to which Marceline turns into a monster and Finn is excited to go find diamonds.

Episode 5

It's Mother's Day in Ooo, the day when you give flowers to the ghosts of all your female relatives so they don't haunt you in the coming year. Finn and Jake head to the graveyard with a whole wagon of flowers. They have a lot of stops to make if they're going to see all the aunts and grandmas. They say hi to a couple aunts who perk up and pinch their cheeks and make fun of Finn's lack of stretching ability and then their ghosts disappear. Lots of folks are in the graveyard, giving flowers to their moms. But their grandmother, Martha, isn't there. Gerome is there though, and even though he hasn't seen Martha, he says that he's done his job. He came to visit, and it's not his fault she's not there. He just leaves his lame, small flowers there and leaves. Finn and Jake don't want to be like Gerome, so they look all over for her, growing more and more frantic as time passes. “She's gonna haunt us!” “And we still have to see Ethel!” “I don't know, man. Maybe we should just leave some flowers.” “No! We're better than that!” “Yeah!” “Let me hear you say it!” “We're better than that!” “Rarrr!” They decide to go visit Ethel and come back later, so at least they won't have Ethel haunt them. Ethel is their paternal grandmother, who acts a lot like Joshua. She lives in a dark, creepy corner of the graveyard, where you have to crawl through thorny bushes and barbed wire. She wants them to get off her lawn, and shoots a ghost shotgun at them. They have to duck behind a fallen tree trunk to wonder if the ghost shotgun can hurt them. She's shouting at them to go away and how they're too skinny. They end up throwing flowers at her and shouting “We love you, Memaw!” at which point she vanishes. Their Aunt Mertyl saw this and is appalled, and spreads the news of how rude they are. It's difficult to visit all the other relatives, who hit them with flowers before disappearing, kick over their flower wheel barrow, and won't tell them where Martha is. Bruised and tired, with most of their flowers destroyed, with the sun setting and no sign of Martha, they head home to behind the shed to visit their mom. Their mom is glad to see them and loves what's left of the flowers and says they tried their best and that Ethel's always been rude. And, hey! Martha's coming by for tea later! She wanted to spend the day surfing since she doesn't have the opportunity much anymore. Martha is indeed impressed with how hard they tried to find her, and decides she'll haunt Gerome next year.

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